Saturday, January 8, 2011

Mysterious him.

He told me that he loved the way I talk. There was something about the way he said things. You just had to believe him. They'd ask, the others, the ignorant, about how blatantly I trusted his words. But they'd perhaps never know, how much I love that he had nothing to analyse about me. He was subtle, the way the breeze is when its barely there. At times, he was flattering. They'd ask me about him, his name, about how he looked. I could only feign a smile. He's my mystery, my very own, and he's not to be shared with anyone, not in words, not anyway, anyhow. For him I was the most beautiful dancer in the world, when in reality, my feet lay numb since the last five years. For him, I was the sweetest voice in the world, never mind the fact that I barely talk. For him, I was a vivacious beauty, never mind the scar that covers half my face. For him, I was alive, though I was dead for the rest...


UPDATE : Well, many people have gone on to ask whether this story is fiction or not. Well, it is. It is basically about a defamed woman having many a weaknesses, but with a guy, for whom, she's perfect the way she is. Some lines may be inspired though. ;)

25 comments:

UjjwalRaaj said...

Well....that one put a smile on my face! Reminded me of a friend in your state :)

Blasphemous Aesthete said...

:)
Thats the way it should be, thats the way it is. Glad you have one mystery of this type.

Sourav said...

You talking about me here? ;)

Lovely, that's the way he should be!

Avi said...

Nicely written.

clueless said...

its struck a cord....the ending was plain awesome

Priyanka Banerjee said...

Well written, leaves an impact!
Fiction hai kya?

vineet said...

well narrated n though few stones unturned, watz dis guy;s role in a bigger picture?

PULKIT said...

the mystery sounded mushy! wishing you... it unholds further as beautifully as it has been so far :)
take care.

PS - U have a beautiful template to your blog, has an innate appeal to it, particularly that frog out there which welcomes, the new readers like it did to me :) :D its kinda cute!

The Silhouette said...

Hey, Hi
hmmm...i liked the way you weaved the story...it opens up nicely...the pieces unfolds in the right pace...
the message that it carries is excellent i would say...it is what love is, learning to accept the person for what they are...a relationship gets strong when you accept the person with their imperfections...and for you, those imperfections cease to exist...its just the person that matters, nothing else...

Best Regards,
The Silhouette...

The Many Colours of Happiness said...

That's so well written! Very moving :)

Iqra said...

Lovely post :) This is how one can be loved..

Meher S B said...

@ujjwalRaaj Some lines are inspired. That's it.

@Blasphemous Aesthete Shhh!

@Sourav, Avi, clueless, Thank you.

@Priyanka Banerjee Fiction hi hei, though some lines maybe inspired. ;)

@Vineet, he just sticks out for her, always.

Meher S B said...

@Pulkit thanks, that was flattering.

@The Silhouette So true.

@The Many colours of happiness @Iqra thank you.

Rolling Stone said...

Hey hi,
Really a subtle portrayal of the true love and especially the way story unfolds.I loved it.

btw, awesome blogs I have read couple of them and really liked them and the best part is that u reply back to every comment on ur blog which usually folks don't do as the of their followers increases.
:):):):).....

Priyanka Banerjee said...

Call me Priyanka ;)
Haha :P

Schizophrenic said...

Its lovely, I want more of it :)

Meher S B said...

@ Rolling Stone I share my email id with your name. =P Thanks for the comment.

@Priyanka We're good now. =)

@Sneha You will get more of it.

Rolling Stone said...

thats sounds cool...

P.S.-follow my blog too...
if u like it.:):):):)...

Kelvin S. M. said...

Hi! Thank you for droppin' by my blog... i appreciate your kindness... Good day and nice space in here!!!:)

nil said...

You've made the bond sound so subtle and preacious in a beautifully graceful way. Really well written, and I'd say you're really lucky.. for as you said some lines were inspired, and to feel inspired, one needs to truly feel those intiricate moments of epiphanies :-)

Cheers,
Nil.

Splatters Of Ink said...

Beautifully written. I love the thought and idea behind it. The idea is so original. I've never come across anything of the sort.

Meher S B said...

@ Kelvin thanks much and thanks a ton for the follow. =)

@nil I'm lucky. Thanks for dropping by.

@Splatters Of Ink Thankyou so much. And thanks for the follow.

thescribblespace said...

You've put the focus on him really well. It masquerades as fiction though :)

divsi said...

heya ! hows u meher:) feels great to be back to yr bloG:) m lady u have absolutely transformed into a perfectionist writer:) love yr style:) great to see you write profound stuff!
glad to be back on d bloggin scene:)

Mehak said...

great post! i think this is one of my favorites here.. :)